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vanhees
    Member since: May 30, 2007 Rank: Viking King (599 Posts) |
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Post them and it might bring you GP's...
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Blue
Member since: Nov 22, 2006 Rank: Princess (819 Posts) |
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Yeah, if you point them out, I'll give you some GPs or whatever.
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landsky
Member since: Apr 5, 2008 Rank: Noble (54 Posts) |
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Sarah Blue, I have contacted you directly several times with problems on the About Us/History page. Here are my entire comments (4 pages of 12-point on MS Word. I would appreciate some response:
Proofreading of “About Us/History”
In the following, I deleted all the ok stuff. Also, the pictures. My comments and changes are in Red.
Listen, my comments are all dead-perfect written English but not always the best for your target audience and the tone of your message (I mean with “goats in the house” pretty much anything goes!). The main thing is a lack of consistency " this can drive anyone nuts, like speed bumps. And, not fer nothin’, if you aren’t consistent on trade-marked names, it opens CH to attack.
Wes Kobylak
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Squeaky was crowned winner of the Friendly Giant (Listen, you gotta give equal time to Mr. Dress Up and his tickle trunk) IdeaWarz Tournament with his idea "GPS Location Device/Member-Supplied Info"" [one quote mark only] which will help travelers with GPS devices upload travel tips and comments for each other. [add: Thanks to] Thomas Malone for the invite!
The Bazaar (Cambrian House's crowdsourced marketplace for ideas, businesses, job postings and more) launched thanks to the awesome work Chris, Marrone and the team.
April 2007
Community Owned
The conference and expo focused on emerging industry trends, high-ranking speakers, and new and veteran Web 2.0 companies.[space]Our Tiki Booth was a hit!
March 2007
Cambrian House Wins Great Canadian Pitch Off [hyphen?]
After winning Pitch4Profit, MJ presents at the Great Canadian Pitch-Off [or no hyphen?] (at the Canadian Venture Forum) and wins.
February 2007
His idea, Speed Dating by Webcam, beat of 15 [huh?]other contenders. ChildOfTv thought of this idea while fostering a long distance relationship with his girlfriend over instant messaging.
Pitch4Profit - Cambrian House Advances
Out of 25 semi-finalists, Cambrian House is among the three finalists to move on to the final round of the competition: a live pitch at the Great Canadian Pitch [hyphen or not to hyphen, that is the question]votes and will present to the crowd in March.
IdeaForge Goes Live
After much anticipation IdeaForge, is released. IdeaForge gives people the opportunity to have more room to elaborate on their ideas. Slogans, logos, pitches and commericials can now help you promote your idea.
Community Next
On February 10th, MJ, JR, Rob, Jason, Sarah and Jasmine headed to Stanford University for Community Next - the first conference aimed solely at bringing social networking communities together to discuss emerging trends, common practices, and debate tools, and philosophies.
December 2006
Christmas Party!
CH Christmas Party. Christine challenges Zack to an epic Dance-Dance [again, consistentcy; elsewhere this is hyphenated] Revolution battle as everyone eats, drinks and is merry
Prezzle hopping at Christmas [down to here, you have capitalized each word in your lead headings; from here on, it is kind of hit and miss. It’s best to keep your leads all initial caps.]
Prezzle.com is HOT with loads of last minute Christmas shoppers hitting the site.
http://www.prezzle.com
November 2006
Rob Makes YouTube Top15 [space this]
Rob makes the Top15 on YouTube with this Wii-Tarded [that’s funny!!!] video clip.
See The Video
Golden Axe Tournament
IdeaWarz selects 16 new ideas from IdeaExplorer to compete in its second tournament. The winner? tTechguy's Just for Lunch Networking.
ideawarz.com
October 2006
The Golden Hammer
Our first monthly IdeaWarz tournament, 16 top ideas from the community were pinned against each other to battle it out. The winner? Andy [space] Doan's Fundable Films.
ideawarz.com
Robinhood Fund Begins Development
September 2006
Cambrian House in Business Week
Cambrian House is featured in Business[Space]Week's article about crowdsourcing.
Business Week Article
Guy Kawasaki Induction into NVA
Guy is inducted into the NVA Hall of Fame. To celebrate, JR played some hockey with him.
Read the Letter
June 2006
June Investor Newsletter
-Cambrian House sends Google lunch [does this belong below? Probably not.]
Feeding Google
The CH Team reward
Our CH team finally push the BETA launch. The reward[space]... a new xbox360 in the office (complete with Geometry Wars).
May Investor Newsletter
-Cambrian code hit it big
-Prezzle gained steam
-Neighborhood [I take it this is different from the Robinhood fund?] fund market test
-Goats in the house! [you guys should have a resident psychiatrist.]
Cambrian Code
Coinciding with the launch of the Da Vinci Code, Cambrian Code was released into the universe. This buzz-generating, online puzzle made it to reddit.com
cambrianhouse.com/pwnit
'Flintstoning'
'Flintstoning' refers to using humans behind the scenes to do backend product fulfillment, avoiding the premature automation of a the process prematurely.
Dance-Dance-Revolution [I’ve seen this referred to with no hyphen and with one hyphen]Champion Crowned
Desktop Playground fourth market test [I’ll let you judge whether you want to go through each of these and change them or let them stay]
Golden Tree award
The first Golden Tree [hey, who wants to receive an award that’s not capitalized?]award goes to Christine Anderson!
Prezzle is developed
Pre-order volumes of Prezzle indicated great customer interest. The product was developed and launched in April.
March 2006
Our first product is developed,[or no hyphen and “and”] put live!
Our logo competition
Four designers enter our one-day design competition- one [should be: competition " one. This is the difference between an en-dash and an em-dash. I dunno my hard drive from my floppy, but I know English; way too much.] logo leaves [?leaves alive ?wins]. Using 8, intense one-hour iterations we created the design for our company logo.
PodBlast
It used to be hard to upload videos to your iPod. Frustrations be gone with PodBlast.
AdWord Alerts is market tested
AdWord Alerts sends you real-time messages alerting you of critical activity happening in your Google AdWords campaigns.
Office space
Vacancy rate was at an all time low[space](0.07%), but we lucked out and got a great place in downtown Calgary. [CALGARY?! You could have gone to Edmonton! This brings into question your entire business judgment!]
December 2005
Business Plan
The excel [whoa! Capitalize! You don’t wanna piss these people off!] version of a business plan is put together.
Eat Fear
MJ's B-day. CH starts eating fear[space](raising money). Check out the before and after shots of the party.
The CH name is coined
The thought came from the Cambrian Explosion, where a fantastic burst of plant and animal diversity took place.
October 2005
Idea Conception
MJ conceives the idea for a new Internet startup. [no period] tTo discover and commercialize software ideas by harnessing the wisdom and participation of crowds.
Proofreading of “About Us/History”
In the following, I deleted all the ok stuff. Also, the pictures. My comments and changes are in Red.
Listen, my comments are all dead-perfect written English but not always the best for your target audience and the tone of your message (I mean with “goats in the house” pretty much anything goes!). The main thing is a lack of consistency " this can drive anyone nuts, like speed bumps. And, not fer nothin’, if you aren’t consistent on trade-marked names, it opens CH to attack.
Wes Kobylak
+++++++
Squeaky was crowned winner of the Friendly Giant (Listen, you gotta give equal time to Mr. Dress Up and his tickle trunk) IdeaWarz Tournament with his idea "GPS Location Device/Member-Supplied Info"" [one quote mark only] which will help travelers with GPS devices upload travel tips and comments for each other. [add: Thanks to] Thomas Malone for the invite!
The Bazaar (Cambrian House's crowdsourced marketplace for ideas, businesses, job postings and more) launched thanks to the awesome work Chris, Marrone and the team.
April 2007
Community Owned
The conference and expo focused on emerging industry trends, high-ranking speakers, and new and veteran Web 2.0 companies.[space]Our Tiki Booth was a hit!
March 2007
Cambrian House Wins Great Canadian Pitch Off [hyphen?]
After winning Pitch4Profit, MJ presents at the Great Canadian Pitch-Off [or no hyphen?] (at the Canadian Venture Forum) and wins.
February 2007
His idea, Speed Dating by Webcam, beat of 15 [huh?]other contenders. ChildOfTv thought of this idea while fostering a long distance relationship with his girlfriend over instant messaging.
Pitch4Profit - Cambrian House Advances
Out of 25 semi-finalists, Cambrian House is among the three finalists to move on to the final round of the competition: a live pitch at the Great Canadian Pitch [hyphen or not to hyphen, that is the question]votes and will present to the crowd in March.
IdeaForge Goes Live
After much anticipation IdeaForge, is released. IdeaForge gives people the opportunity to have more room to elaborate on their ideas. Slogans, logos, pitches and commericials can now help you promote your idea.
Community Next
On February 10th, MJ, JR, Rob, Jason, Sarah and Jasmine headed to Stanford University for Community Next - the first conference aimed solely at bringing social networking communities together to discuss emerging trends, common practices, and debate tools, and philosophies.
December 2006
Christmas Party!
CH Christmas Party. Christine challenges Zack to an epic Dance-Dance [again, consistentcy; elsewhere this is hyphenated] Revolution battle as everyone eats, drinks and is merry
Prezzle hopping at Christmas [down to here, you have capitalized each word in your lead headings; from here on, it is kind of hit and miss. It’s best to keep your leads all initial caps.]
Prezzle.com is HOT with loads of last minute Christmas shoppers hitting the site.
http://www.prezzle.com
November 2006
Rob Makes YouTube Top15 [space this]
Rob makes the Top15 on YouTube with this Wii-Tarded [that’s funny!!!] video clip.
See The Video
Golden Axe Tournament
IdeaWarz selects 16 new ideas from IdeaExplorer to compete in its second tournament. The winner? tTechguy's Just for Lunch Networking.
ideawarz.com
October 2006
The Golden Hammer
Our first monthly IdeaWarz tournament, 16 top ideas from the community were pinned against each other to battle it out. The winner? Andy [space] Doan's Fundable Films.
ideawarz.com
Robinhood Fund Begins Development
September 2006
Cambrian House in Business Week
Cambrian House is featured in Business[Space]Week's article about crowdsourcing.
Business Week Article
Guy Kawasaki Induction into NVA
Guy is inducted into the NVA Hall of Fame. To celebrate, JR played some hockey with him.
Read the Letter
June 2006
June Investor Newsletter
-Cambrian House sends Google lunch [does this belong below? Probably not.]
Feeding Google
The CH Team reward
Our CH team finally push the BETA launch. The reward[space]... a new xbox360 in the office (complete with Geometry Wars).
May Investor Newsletter
-Cambrian code hit it big
-Prezzle gained steam
-Neighborhood [I take it this is different from the Robinhood fund?] fund market test
-Goats in the house! [you guys should have a resident psychiatrist.]
Cambrian Code
Coinciding with the launch of the Da Vinci Code, Cambrian Code was released into the universe. This buzz-generating, online puzzle made it to reddit.com
cambrianhouse.com/pwnit
'Flintstoning'
'Flintstoning' refers to using humans behind the scenes to do backend product fulfillment, avoiding the premature automation of a the process prematurely.
Dance-Dance-Revolution [I’ve seen this referred to with no hyphen and with one hyphen]Champion Crowned
Desktop Playground fourth market test [I’ll let you judge whether you want to go through each of these and change them or let them stay]
Golden Tree award
The first Golden Tree [hey, who wants to receive an award that’s not capitalized?]award goes to Christine Anderson!
Prezzle is developed
Pre-order volumes of Prezzle indicated great customer interest. The product was developed and launched in April.
March 2006
Our first product is developed,[or no hyphen and “and”] put live!
Our logo competition
Four designers enter our one-day design competition- one [should be: competition " one. This is the difference between an en-dash and an em-dash. I dunno my hard drive from my floppy, but I know English; way too much.] logo leaves [?leaves alive ?wins]. Using 8, intense one-hour iterations we created the design for our company logo.
PodBlast
It used to be hard to upload videos to your iPod. Frustrations be gone with PodBlast.
AdWord Alerts is market tested
AdWord Alerts sends you real-time messages alerting you of critical activity happening in your Google AdWords campaigns.
Office space
Vacancy rate was at an all time low[space](0.07%), but we lucked out and got a great place in downtown Calgary. [CALGARY?! You could have gone to Edmonton! This brings into question your entire business judgment!]
December 2005
Business Plan
The excel [whoa! Capitalize! You don’t wanna piss these people off!] version of a business plan is put together.
Eat Fear
MJ's B-day. CH starts eating fear[space](raising money). Check out the before and after shots of the party.
The CH name is coined
The thought came from the Cambrian Explosion, where a fantastic burst of plant and animal diversity took place.
October 2005
Idea Conception
MJ conceives the idea for a new Internet startup. [no period] tTo discover and commercialize software ideas by harnessing the wisdom and participation of crowds.
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Blue
Member since: Nov 22, 2006 Rank: Princess (819 Posts) |
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Thanks for finding typos for us.
I will give you some Glory Points.
My apologies, I didn't realize that the typos were of such an urgent nature that you needed an immediate response.
I will give you some Glory Points.
My apologies, I didn't realize that the typos were of such an urgent nature that you needed an immediate response.
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landsky
Member since: Apr 5, 2008 Rank: Noble (54 Posts) |
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No, no, not urgent, Sarah. I just wanted to know you received it. Sorry for acting pushy. Wes
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